The DioField Chronicle: a retrospective and analysis

I enjoyed the story of the DioField Chronicle but what prevented it from being greater than it had the potential to be? What did it do well? 0:00:00 Intro 0:06:33 Pacing and the problems it creates in the DioField Chronicle 0:22:30 The Ivangar Angle 0:29:05 A convenient development 0:32:32 Characters 0:44:20 Characters done well: Waltaquin Redditch 0:51:27 Iscarion Colchester 0:57:56 Fredret Lester 1:06:06 Andrias Rhondarson and the ending explained These are just my thoughts anyways. I trip up over names and words, so forgive me.